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In many countries fast food has become part of life. It affects people’s lifestyle and diet as well. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give your opinion and relevant examples.

As
people
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's routines have become increasingly busy, there has been a rise in services aimed
to make
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 life easier. The creation of apps which deliver fast
food
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comes
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 to facilitate every worker's life.
However
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, the consistency of having hamburgers and pizza can impact their lifestyle. In
this
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 essay, I will be providing my opinion and giving relevant examples to support my ideas. One of the major arguments against the constant intake of fast
food
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 is that it is easier to get used to ordering unhealthy meals. The convenience of getting a ready meal in a fast
food
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 chain can blind us to
realise
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the unhealthy in each dish.
For example
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, a busy worker wants to have dinner and orders a pizza. He won't spend time preparing the
food
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 and cleaning
later
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up later
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. The feeling of ordering, paying and not having to cook and wash the dishes can be relevant when someone wants to try to stay healthy and fit.
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, the more fast
food
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 you eat, the more carbs and sugar you digest
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, in the end, it can affect
people
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's lifestyle and
self- esteem
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self-esteem
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. With
an
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excessive sugar and
carbs
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carb
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 intake,
people
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 start to get slower and
unhealthy
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healthy
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, which can lead to laziness
at
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in
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 doing
sport
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sports
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 and exercising. On top of that, the lack of nutrients found in salads and healthy products can impact our mood and the way we interact with our surroundings.
To conclude
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, I would argue that a diet based on fast
food
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 can affect our lifestyle and the way we interact with
people
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. To prevent it,
people
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 should be balanced and try to have healthy meals
as
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, as
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 it can increase their nutrient intake and prevent diseases.

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task response
Be clear in your view at once in the intro and restate it in the end.
task response
Add more true examples and explain how they show your idea.
coherence
Use simple, clear words and fix any hard phrases.
coherence
Link ideas with small words like also, but, so, and then in a steady order.
strength
You show a clear answer that fast food can affect life.
strength
You give reasons and ideas with some links.
strength
There are some good connectors and flow in places.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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