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More and more countries have a problem with plastic waste, polluting the countryside and oceans. What problems does it cause? How can these problems be solved?

One of the serious environmental problems is
plastic
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waste
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 because it is polluting oceans and other parts of the Earth.
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 is because the consumption of
goods
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 using
plastic
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 materials has been increasing more rapidly than ever before.
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 essay will discuss the cause of
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 pollutant and viable solutions to address
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 problem.
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 with, economic activity is dominated by production and consumption of
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, and some of these
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 exported to other countries amid globalisation.
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, consumerism
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 leads to another problem, especially the
waste
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 stemming from the production of consumer
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, especially
plastic
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, which is a
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non-degradable material, which means that these substances cannot be broken down or decay by natural processes for hundreds of years.
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, in the South Javanese coastal
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, plastics in massive amounts can be found since they were produced in 1990. These materials eventually pollute the oceans
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 and threaten their biodiversity. To mitigate risks
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 problem, the government has a crucial role in educating societies about the harmful effects of
plastic
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waste
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 on our environment. By doing so, their awareness will be raised and is expected to reduce the usage of
products
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 made from plastics.
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, in department stores in Indonesia, bags made from
plastic
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 are no longer provided, and to carry the
goods
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 purchased, customers have to pay extra for bags made from fabric. Another sensible solution is to encourage people to use recycled
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,
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 as paper bags, which are environmentally-friendly, and do not pollute our environment. In conclusion, consumerism has led to the production of
goods
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 made from
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 in massive
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, which pollutes the ocean and our environment. The most sensible solution is to educate societies about the perilous effects of
plastic
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waste
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 and encourage them to use recycled
products
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.

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structure
Work on clear, full ideas in each paragraph. State one idea per paragraph and give a clear link to next idea.
content
Add more facts or examples to back up points. This helps show you know the issue.
language
Check grammar and word use. Use simple words and avoid long, hard phrases.
conclusion
Use a short opening sentence that says what you will talk about, and a short last sentence that sums up.
task
You answer both parts of the question.
structure
There is a plan with intro, body and conclusion.
content
You give real life examples.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • aquatic ecosystems
  • terrestrial ecosystems
  • entangled
  • degradation
  • toxic substances
  • infiltrate
  • food chain
  • economic implications
  • municipalities
  • biodegradable
  • responsible consumption
  • incentivizing
  • environmentally friendly
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