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Some people feel that the design of newly constructed buildings in big cities should be controlled by government. others believe those who financed the construction of a building should be free to design it as they fit. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some people believe that all the designs of newly constructed buildings in big cities should be under
controlled
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control
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 by the
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government
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government,
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while
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 others argue
thatshould
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should
 be a decision of the finance party of their own .
This
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 essay will discuss both views and my opinion as well. When
this
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under
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controll
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control
 by the
government
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 or the responsible authority, buildings should be created
according to
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 a one frame . As an example, the party who need the building
,
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apply
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 should
be
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abide by some rules and regulations. Like , land permission,
hight
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height
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 of the building, and strongly
consider
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considering
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about
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apply
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the place ,and where
is
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it is
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 going to be situated , and
avoid
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avoiding
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 or
try
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trying
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 to reduce
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congestion
are
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must be
the
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their
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 main responsibilities
of
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apply
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them
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apply
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.
More over
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,
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the
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apply
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congesion
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congestion
 will mostly
helps
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help
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 to protect from environmental pollution.
Some times
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Sometimes
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 it helps to
reducet
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reduce
a
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the
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 risk of fire
hazord
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hazard
. The landscape and the geography should be
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considered
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 because of
purpose
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the purpose
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 of
reduce
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reducing
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 the risk of
earthquicks
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earthquakes
, when
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confirming
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a
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the
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hight
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height
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 of a building .
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However
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However,
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 when
cosidering
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considering
government
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 regulations, always give priority
for
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to
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 building designs and
the
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apply
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structures , because most of the constructions are
according to
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 the cultural and
hisrorical
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historical
 methods.
On the other hand
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, some parties need to design their buildings on their own methods. When the financial party
who
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that
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spent
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spends
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 money like new companies
,
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apply
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prefer to use some modern technologies.
This
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 is really appropriate for building a new modern city. There are lots of fresh designs and
presant
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present
 generation mostly happy to follow new appliances .
On the other hand
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,
this
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 own decision could be a huge
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 to the whole public. The reason for
that is
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,
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 some certain individuals do not care about the public or
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environment
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environmental
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 pollution. These selfish communities only want their success. They will make a congested area . Not only that , it makes the path
to be
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flooded in
raining
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rainy
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 seasons. In conclusion,
These
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these
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both
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two
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 views have certain advantages and disadvantages . My opinion is to be
more
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a more
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balance approached
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balanced approach
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 all the time.
Furthermore
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, try to go through with some
government
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 basic regulations and
should be
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apply
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consider
about
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the environmental sustainability , and geographic conditions before
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 the final outcome.

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task
Plan your answer. Start with a short intro that says the two sides and your view. Then write two clear body paragraphs, one for each side, with a simple example. End with a clear conclusion that restates your view.
coherence
Make the text flow better. Use links like and, but, also, however. Use clear topic sentences and end each paragraph with a small idea.
content
You try to discuss both sides and give a view.
content
You show idea of laws and rules in city building.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Architectural heritage
  • Urban harmony
  • Government-controlled
  • Safety standards
  • Accessibility
  • Environmental sustainability
  • Investors
  • Developers
  • Innovate
  • Modern trends
  • Vibrant cityscapes
  • Iconic buildings
  • Economic opportunities
  • Balanced approach
  • Guidelines
  • Architectural innovation
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