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The chart below shows the changes in three different areas of crime in Machester city centre from 2003-2012.

The line graph delineates the fluctuations in three distinct types of crime in Manchester city centre between 2003 and 2012.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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burglary
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 faced a general downward trajectory in crime numbers. Meanwhile, robbery fluctuated before remaining relatively stable. In stark contrast,
car
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theft
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 figures increased moderately across the period. Focusing on
burglary
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 and robbery, these were
initially
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 at 3400 and 500 crimes, respectively, in 2003.
Burglary
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 peaked at around 3700 in 2004 before plummeting. Afterwards,
burglary
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 figures slightly rose between 2008 and 2009 before
leveling
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 off for the rest of the period, reaching approximately 1400 in 2012. Robbery exhibited moderate changes and reached its zenith in 2005 at 900 crimes before fluctuating and eventually
stabilizing
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stabilising
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 from 2011 to 2012 at around 500.
Car
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theft
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 stood at roughly
2300
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2300,
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 where it marginally declined up until 2006;
subsequently
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, between 2006 and
2007
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2007,
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car
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theft
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 numbers were similar to
burglary
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 rates;
however
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,
car
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theft
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 crimes overtook
burglary
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 figures in 2007
reaching
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, reaching
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 about 2200. Despite facing a small
dip
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dip,
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 it eventually recovered and consistently increased for the rest of the period, standing at around 2800.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words burglary, car, theft with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "moderately" was used 2 times.
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