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Band 4.5

in the future, nobody will buy printed books or newspapers because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying? To what extent, do you agree or disagree with this statement?

It is argued that printed
newspaper
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newspapers
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 and
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book
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books
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 will not be bought in the years to come as almost all
type
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types
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 of content can be accessed digitally. I am firmly in favour of
this
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 idea since it is a more effective approach in terms of convenience and environmentally friendly. First and foremost, regarding time saving, a vast array of information is now available in digital
form
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form,
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therefore
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 people can read newspapers and
book
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 right away.
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,
It
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it
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 will take a few
hour
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hours
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 to go to
bookstore
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the bookstore
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 or 3 to 4 days for a
book
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 to be
delivered
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delivered,
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while
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 in
this
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 day and
age
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age,
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 individuals can consume all
type
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types
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 of content instantly on their computer or mobile devices.
Moreover
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, the expenditure of purchasing printed books or
newspaper
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newspapers
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 can be reduced significantly as the digital versions of
it
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them
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 will be more affordable on the internet
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; furthermore
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furthermore
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furthermore,
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 some of
it
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them
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is
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are
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 free of charge.
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, in regard to
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the environmental
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environmental
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environment
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, an enormous amount of plants will be cut down in order to make books and newspapers. In consequence, there will be a considerable rise in global warming and deforestation.
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, the process of producing these
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book
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books
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 can produce a
numerous
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large
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 amount of carbon dioxide
which
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, which
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 is the cause of emissions.
For
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this
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 reason, stop buying printed products can bring substantial benefits to the
eco system
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ecosystem
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. In conclusion,
It
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it
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 is my conviction that more and more people will consume digital content
instead
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 of reading printed newspapers and books.
Due to
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it’s
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its
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convenient
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convenience
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 and time-efficient
similarly
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, Using
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Using
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using
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book
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books
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 or reading news on the internet can bring
positive
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a positive
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 effect to the environment.

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task
Your answer shows a clear view that you agree with the idea. Keep this stance in every paragraph, and avoid new points in the conclusion.
content
Build your ideas with more detail. For each point, add a simple example or data.
language
Improve flow by using link words and correct grammar. Use proper t-forms and plurals.
structure
Use paragraphs more cleanly: one idea per paragraph. Start with topic sentence.
idea
Clear position on the issue.
structure
Basic structure with introduction, body and conclusion.
content
Some good examples used.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • printed books
  • newspapers
  • online reading
  • digital content
  • paywall
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-saving
  • environmental impact
  • traditional reading experience
  • ownership
  • personal connection
  • reliability
  • credibility
  • digital divide
  • accessibility issues
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