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Writing Samples
Band 4

The use of artificial intelligence in daily life is increasing rapidly. Do the advantages of artificial intelligence outweigh the disadvantages?

It's
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 no doubt that AI has
became
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become
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the
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 hit nowadays. I hear people talking about
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 topic anywhere
anytime
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, anytime
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and
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this
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teconology transfoms
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technology transforms
 people's
life
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lives
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 deeply. So I think the advantages of artificial intelligence
outweighs
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outweigh
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 the
drawback
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drawbacks
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. Just as I've stated
AI
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, AI
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transformed
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has transformed
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 our
life
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lives
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 no matter at home or workplace. For me, I rely on the AI driving even
each
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every
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 single day, because I dislike driving the car and
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t
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 afford a specific driver. I hadn'
t
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though
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thought
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 cars would be
cable
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capable
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driving
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 by themselves
,
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however
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, the development of technology
bring
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brings
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 sci-tech movies into
the
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apply
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reality.
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, AI
palys
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plays
 a big role in my office. In the past, I
need
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needed to
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 review and
remend
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amend
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 many contracts every day. Afterwards, I passed these
low quality
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low-quality
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 jobs to AI when it comes to the public. It's so convenient for
employee
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employees
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 like me, which means we can save time on something important. Every coin has two sides
,
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 AI is in the domain too. Actually, AI don'
t
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 know everything and sometimes pretends it is
knowledgeble
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knowledgeable
 by giving you wrong answers. So we need to be careful when using AI in any situation. If you rely on AI totally, which means you need to take accountability for its mistakes. To handle
this
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 situation, I suggest you
to
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apply
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check the
outcoming
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outcome
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 from AI as it isn'
t
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 mature now and
couldn'
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can't
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t
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reckon
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be
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 as a subject
tolability
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of tolerance
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 in law. In summary, though AI has many shortcomings ,like illusion,
deceiving
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 and fault, we still need to keep
a
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 open mind in
AI
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the AI
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 era.
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However
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 we shouldn'
t
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 outsource our work totally to AI ,now that
hunman
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humans
is
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are
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 the real
host
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hosts
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 of the world.

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planning
Plan your writing first. Have three clear ideas. Add a short intro and a short end.
content
Say one main good side, one bad side, and give your view. Then add how to fix the bad parts.
language
Use easy words and keep short sentences.
cohesion
Use linking words to join ideas, like and, but, also, so.
examples
Give one example for each idea to show it well.
idea
Some good idea to show home and work use.
detail
Some examples are given, like car driving and office work.
balance
Shows care for both sides, not just one view.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Artificial Intelligence (AI)
  • Efficiency
  • Productivity
  • Data analysis
  • Decision-making
  • Job displacement
  • Economic impact
  • Ethical concerns
  • Privacy issues
  • Surveillance
  • Virtual assistants
  • Smart technology
  • Over-reliance
  • Skills atrophy
  • Technological advancement
  • Convenience
  • Personalized recommendations
  • Human expertise
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