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Most scientific and inventions and discoveries are worthless and only waste time and money resources. To what extend do you agree or disagree?give your own opinion

In the modern era, people cannot
refused
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refuse
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 the discoveries and
inventions
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,
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apply
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 which
have done
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were made
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 a few decades ago. Gadgets and machines are developed with the help of
inventions
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.
This
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eassy
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essay
 will give clarity with the necessary supporting details in the upcoming paragraph.
Firstly
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, there are numerous reasons which
shows
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show
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 that
inventions
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 and discoveries
makes
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make
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 the life of
people
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people's
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 is easier. Scientists
creates
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create
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 a
robot
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for
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apply
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the help
of
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apply
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humans, so now, most of the industries and factories
work have
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is
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 done by robots
and
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, and
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 it is not worthless. The reason behind
is
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this is
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 that
,
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apply
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robot
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robots
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 can do work
fast
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as fast
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 as compared to mobs, and
less
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require less
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 labour,
as well as
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 work will finish efficiently.
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, one of the big
browine
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brownie
company
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companies
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 in Canada, who bake
a
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apply
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browine
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brownies
 before
execute
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executing
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 the
robot
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, 15 workers are working on
line
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the line
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, but after the invention of
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robot
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the robot
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, only five employees are working on that line.
Moreover
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, any research and experiment are
time consuming
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time-consuming
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and
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, and
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 nobody knows how long it will run
as well as
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 government
also
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spend
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spends
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 a lot of money on
the
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apply
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inventions
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,
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;
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however
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,
but
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apply
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this
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 is not in the
hand
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hands
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 of scientists.
For example
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,
a
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the
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 most popular
lady
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lady,
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 Kalpna
chawla
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Chawla
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,
she
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apply
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was the first lady who
arrived
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at
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on
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moon
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the moon
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,only
find
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to find
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 the prevention of cancer disease
and
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, and
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 she spent two years on the moon
, after
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. After
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 that
when
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, when
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 she found the solution and came back,
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then
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apply
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her plane crashed
and
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, and
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 she died. That's why
,
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apply
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 discoveries take
long
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a long
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 time. In
the
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apply
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conclusion,
time consuming
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time-consuming
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 is the main part of any discovery and invention because
life
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the lives
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 of people
depends
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depend
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 on it. But scientists try to make mobs
life
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apply
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easy with new experiments.

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planning
Plan your answer. Make a small plan at the start: your view, 2 or 3 reasons, a short end.
content
Say your view clearly. If you agree or disagree, write it in the first or second sentence and stay with it.
cohesion
Use one idea in each paragraph. Use simple link words like and, but, also, so. Connect your ideas.
grammar
Check grammar. Use short, simple sentences. Do not use long or tricky words.
examples
Use examples that fit the point. Check facts and keep them small and true.
content
You do try to give reasons why inventions help
effort
There is an effort to use examples and to talk about the topic
content
You begin with a view about invention and time
Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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