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Band 4

In many countries nowadays,consumers can go to a supermarket and buy food produced all over the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

In recent years, various
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food
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foods
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 from all over the world
is
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have been
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 presented on
shelf
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shelves
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 in
supermarket
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supermarkets
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 to appeal
people
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to people
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. In my opinion, I believe
this
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 trend is a positive development for people’s
life
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lives
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 and countries’
economy
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economies
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.
Firstly
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, the diversity of
food
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 in
supermarket
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supermarkets
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extremely
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has extremely
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 improved
convenience
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the convenience
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of
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for
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public
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. It helps people gain special
food
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 from other countries
with
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at
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affordable
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an affordable
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 price and short time.
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, some citizens
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who lived
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lived
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 in cold areas can buy
tropic
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tropical
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 fruits without the cost of transportation.
Furthermore
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, people can know other countries’
s
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culture by
food
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, like
,
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apply
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Indian
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Indians
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 are prohibited
to eat
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from eating
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 pork
meal
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due to
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 their region
belief
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beliefs
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.
Consequently
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, the various
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food
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foods
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 not only satisfied
public’s
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the public’s
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 demands via a lower cost
and
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but
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also
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provide
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provided
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 a
ways
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way
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 to communicate culture. Meanwhile,
diverse
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a diverse
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 choice of
food
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 in
market
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the market
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that
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apply
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is a sign of economic
globalization
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globalisation
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economy
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apply
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. The demands of
market
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the market
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 promote the development of
export
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the export
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 industry and relevant farms.
For instance
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,
supermarket
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a supermarket
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 bought various
food
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production
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products
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 from farmers, and farmers sent these
production
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products
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 via
export
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an export
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 company. It
form
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forms
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 a chain of economy. A lot of
company
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companies
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 and
factory
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factories
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 set up cooperation with
oversea
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overseas
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 enterprises
,
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Therefore
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,
this
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 trend
present
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presents
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the
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apply
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closely
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close
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 communication
of
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among
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 enterprises in
global
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the global
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 financial
.
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sector.
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 Admittedly, some
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food
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foods
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experienced
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that experienced
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long time
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long-time
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 transportation had changed in quality. These changed
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food
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foods
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 may cause health problems and
uncomfortable
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an uncomfortable
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 taste. To overcome it, researchers invented a novel frozen technology and absolutely addressed the issue.
As a result
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, the
advance
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advanced
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 storage technology had a huge improvement. From what has been discussed above, I believe
this
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 trend will create more positive achievements in our
life
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lives
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.

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task response
Start with a clear line that states your view. Then give two or three short reasons and a quick example for each.
task response
Check the facts you write, especially about culture and beliefs. Make sure what you say is correct.
coherence
Use one idea per paragraph. Have a small end line in each paragraph to show how it links to your view.
coherence
Use simple join words like first, also, and but to show how ideas go together.
style
Keep phrases short. Use common words and avoid long, hard phrases.
task response
Your view is clear and you state it at once.
coherence
You give some example to back up what you say.
content
You touch both life and money side of the topic.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • nutrition
  • cultural exposure
  • competitive markets
  • economic boost
  • employment opportunities
  • carbon footprint
  • environmental impact
  • local produce
  • food security
  • global supply chain
  • sustainable practices
  • consumer choice
  • market dynamics
  • price competition
  • agricultural sector
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