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Writing Samples
Band 4

Governments should spend money on public transportation rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

It has been a concern that the state should
utilize
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 its finances on improving public means of transport
and
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 not the
roads
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.
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will disagree
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 with it because better
roads
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 reduce maintenance
cost
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costs
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 and
promotes
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 safety for all passengers. The primary reason
as to
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why more money should be spent on road repairs is
due to
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 the impacts of poor
roads
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has to
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the
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motor cars. Most of the cars
breakdown
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break down
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 as they try to navigate
though
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through
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 slippery or uneven
roads
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.
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, the highway worsens during extreme rainy and dry seasons.
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,
Study
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 done
In
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 Thailand in 2021, most of the garages were full
with
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of
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 faulty cars
which
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, which
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 was
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as
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a result of poor
roads
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 caused by heavy rainfall. The second reason is that, when the
roads
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 are smooth and easy to pass on
.
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 even
the
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pendestrians
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pedestrians
 feel safe as the
accidents
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 are few.
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, the expansion of the
roads
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 will lead to
ease
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 congestion of the vehicles and
therefore
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 no need for
rush
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 that causes
collision
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collisions
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.
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, in Kenya, between the years 2000 and
2003
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2003,
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 the
accidents
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 reported decreased from 70% to 55% as the super highway was built.
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shown
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shows
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 that there was a massive reduction
of
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accidents
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as a result
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 of road expansion. In conclusion,
however
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how
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much the government can opt to improve
public
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the public
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 transport sector, I believe that
transport
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the transport
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 ministry should be
prioritized
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instead
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.
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 is because it will
safe
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tha
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the
 cost of maintaining the vehicle and
also
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 drop the rate of
accidents
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.

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task
Keep to one main idea. Do not switch to another view. Make your choice clear at the start and stay with it.
structure
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support
Use examples that fit your point and explain how they show it. If a fact is not sure, say it as a possible example.
grammar
Use shorter sentences and plain words. Check grammar and spelling carefully.
lexical
Use simple words from common lists. Do not use hard words. Check punctuation and make your meaning clear.
task
The essay shows a clear stance and repeats it in the end.
coherence
There is some evidence and attempt to explain points.
organization
There is a basic shape of intro, body and conclusion.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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