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The graph below shows the number of overseas who came to the uk for different purposes between 1989 and 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The line chart provides key information about the number of people who came to the UK for different reasons between 1989 and 2009. The units are measured in millions of
visitors
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.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that the number of
visitors
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 increases over the period.
In addition
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, holidays are still increasing,
whereas
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 business and visiting friends decrease
at the end
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 of the period.
According to
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 what is shown, in 1989, holiday started from almost 7million
of
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apply
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visitors
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, visit friends started from almost 4million
of
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apply
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visitors
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and
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, and
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 business started from almost 6million of
It
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. It
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 is an incredible increase over the 10 years. In terms of 2009, the number of
visitors
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 increased over the period, holiday ends from almost 9million Individuals, visit friends finish almost 6million
visitors
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 , and business starts from almost 7million people.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increases" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 6 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overseas visitors
  • came to the UK
  • different purposes
  • trend
  • overall insights
  • increased
  • decreased
  • fluctuated
  • time period
  • specific purposes
  • mentioned in the graph
  • e.g., business, holiday, study
  • changed over time
  • significant changes
  • notable peaks and troughs
  • possible reasons
  • conclude
  • key points
  • discussed
  • external factors
  • economic factors
  • political events
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