Globalization is positive for economies but its negative side should not be ignored. to what extent do you agree or disagree?

Globalisation
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is beneficial for economies, but it
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has some drawbacks that cannot be neglected.
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essay agrees with
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idea because
globalisation
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leads to environmental pollution and negatively affects local business and culture. The world's
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condition has improved
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the integration and interdependence of economies. Apart from the financial benefits countries are getting from
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trend of
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, it has
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resulted in environmental damage. Because industries and manufacturing plants all over the world are just fulfilling the modern domestic demand through tons of pollution and waste into nature. which ultimately, adversely affects all the living creatures.
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, every year, textile industries dump their polluted water into oceans, polluting marine life.
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,
globalisation
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opens the borders for international trade, brings new markets and technology, but
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intense competition for the local market. which is not good because local vendors are struggling to run their business as they are now competing with rivals from different nations.
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, many clothing manufacturers in India are now making less profit because of prices offered by other countries like, from Bangladesh and China. In conclusion,
globalisation
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is causing environmental pollution and harming local industries by hindering their growth, which is not good for the long-term goal.

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task response
State your view clearly in the intro. A short plan will help the reader know your idea from the start.
task response
Add a balance by noting the good side too, or say more why you pick one side. End with a clear final point.
coherence cohesion
Make one idea in each paragraph. Start with a plain line that tells the idea.
coherence cohesion
Link ideas with simple words like and, but, also, however. Use these to show order.
grammar
Check long sentences. If a sentence is long, split into two to avoid wires and run-ons.
strength
Clear view on the topic.
content
Use of real examples (textile waste, clothing makers).
structure
Some flow between ideas.
Your opinion

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