The diagram below shows how geothermal energy is used to produce electricity. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram illustrates the various stages involved in the
process
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of
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through
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generation through
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the use of geothermal energy.
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, it is a
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that consists of five main stages, beginning with the pumping of cold water from the surface of the earth and ending with the
electricity
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generated by the generator
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transferred to the power grid for consumption.
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with, the
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starts at stage 1, where cold water is pumped from the surface of the earth down into a 4.5
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injection well.
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, it is transferred to the geothermal zone, a soil composed of hot rocks, before reaching the production well, which is a vertical pipe similar to the injection well but a bit wider. The
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continues with the hot water
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pumped up through the production well into a condenser on the
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where it is converted into steam, following which it is used to power a turbine and rotate it.
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turbine is connected to an
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generator
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, when rotated by the turbine, produces
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.
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, when the
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generated by the generator is transferred to the power grid for consumption by end users.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words process, electricity with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • geothermal energy
  • renewable source
  • sustainable
  • drilling wells
  • hot water and steam
  • drive turbines
  • generate electricity
  • conversion
  • cooling process
  • re-injected
  • efficiency
  • environmental impact
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