The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart provides key information about the location of
dance
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classes for young people. The units are measured in percentages. The bar chart illustrates the types of
dance
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in a town in Australia that
students
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are currently attending. The units are figures in numbers of
students
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.
Overall
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, it is clear from the first graph that private locations had the highest percentage,
whereas
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the college-based studios had the smallest ratio. In the second bar chart, the
students
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who are under 11 had the largest proportion in ballet,
while
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those aged 11-16 play modern
dance
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.
According to
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what is shown, the private studios represented 48%, school halls (after school) accounted for 24%, community halls and other represented 18%, and college-based studios had just 10%. In terms of types of
dance
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classes, most
students
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who are under 11 preferred ballet, with nearly 600
students
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,
whereas
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adults represented 300
students
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. Approximately 450 children played tap, and just 400 for
students
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who are 11-16 years old. The modern classes had the lowest percentage of kids and the highest number of
students
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for adults.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 79%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words dance, students with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "represented" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • attending
  • currently
  • location
  • variety
  • ballet
  • hip-hop
  • contemporary
  • jazz
  • venues
  • popularity
  • attendees
  • juxtaposing
  • correlating
  • proximity
  • cultural influences
  • trends
  • anomalies
  • monopoly
  • proportion
  • distribution
  • enrollment
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