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The graph below shows the three different kinds of emission sources (oil / coal / gas) of greenhouse gas in the UK

The graph gives information on three types of emission sources (oil, coal,
gas
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) of greenhouse
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gas
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 in the UK.
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, when the
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emissions
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 were increased,
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coal
emissions
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 were decreased over the period. In 1990, the
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emissions
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 started at just 200
million
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tons
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 , and
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 was followed by a considerable rise to 330
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tons
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 in 2010. In 1990, oil
emissions
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 were 280
million
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tons
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but
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 dropped to 220 in 2010. The coal
emissions
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were
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started at just 320
million
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tons
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 , but
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 was followed by a notable drop to 220 in 2010.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words gas, emissions, million, tons with synonyms.
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