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Some people think that boys and girls should attend school together. Others feel that they should be educated separately. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

The topic of having mixed
schools
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 has been a
contreversial
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controversial
 topic ever since the
schools
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 were a thing. Some people
completly
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completely
 reject the thought of their children being in the
presense
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presence
 of students of the opposite sex, and others highly encourage that idea. Personally, I agree with the option that allows both genders to be present in the same classroom.
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 almost all
schools
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 are mixed now, but
this
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 does not change the fact that the porn addiction rates are still as high as before. These high rates are happening even with
boys
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 being in constant contact with girls and seeing them on a daily basis in class
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 these rates would probably double in number if these same
boys
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 were in an
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boys
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 school
instead
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 of a mixed one. To explain why, these
boys
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 would have never seen
how
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what
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 a girl looks like in real life, and would have immediately
went
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 to
porngraphic
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pornographic
 sites where they would have made an even more unrealistic image of women than the
boys
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 in mixed
schools
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 might have.
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, these unrealistic images that
boys
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 are viewing are making them objectify women, are ruining their perception
women
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of women
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, and are making them porn addicts.
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, children of a certain sex not being in contact with another individual from the opposite sex could create long-term problems. These problems include the fact that these individuals might later on in their lives have an extremely difficult time getting to know anyone from the opposite gender, something
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inavitable
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inevitable
 because these people are eventually going to work in the presence of people of the other gender, or even find a significant other to spend the rest of their lives with.

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Task response
Add both sides of the view. Explain more on why some think mixed schools are good, and why some think single-sex schools can be better.
Coherence
Use clear link words to show how ideas fit. End with a short paragraph that restates your view.
Content
Give simple facts or ideas that fit the point. Do not use big or wrong facts.
Language
Check spelling and fix mistakes. Use short, easy sentences so your meaning is clear.
Content
The writer states a clear own view.
Coherence
Some linking words are used to show flow between ideas.
Task response
Topic is clear in the first sentence.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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