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The bar chart shows the distribution of YouTube users worldwide as of January 2023 by age group. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the distribution of YouTube users worldwide as of January 2023 by age group. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph presents the distribution of YouTube clients globally with 6 different
age
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 groups in the first month of the year 2023. Measured in units of dirhams.
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, the
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group
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 of 25-34 is the highest percentage among all 6 categories, and the
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group
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 of 55-64
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 the least percentage among the rest of the
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 groups. At
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there
is
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 similarities ,with the
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 groups of 18-24 and 35-44 , both had 16% as the
clients
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rate
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 of percentage. The highest
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 category,
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which
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 had the highest YouTube users with a
rate
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 of 20%, is the
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group
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 25-34.
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on the other hand
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, the
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group
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 55-64 , which is considered the least among other categories, had a
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 of 8%. The second least category is the
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group
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 65+, with a
rate
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 slightly above 8%.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, group, rate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • age group
  • distribution
  • percentage
  • user base
  • demographic
  • highest
  • lowest
  • significant
  • trend
  • mid-range
  • teenagers
  • young adults
  • middle-aged adults
  • elderly adults
  • global implications
  • marketers
  • content creators
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