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The pie chart shows average monthly student expenditure in the UK in 2016. The bar chart shows sources of student income in the same year.

The pie chart and the bar chart provide key information about the average
student
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cost
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 in the UK in 2016. The units are measured
percentages
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in percentages
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 .
Overall
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 ,it is clear from the graph that for monthly
student
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expenditure
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expenditure,
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 the highest is rent for
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students
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student
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student,
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it
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which
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 is 385
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pound
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pounds
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.
In
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addition
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addition,
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 the food is a second expenditure for
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student
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students
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it
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; it
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cost
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costs
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for
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apply
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them 124
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pound
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pounds
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,
whereas
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 the less for
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student
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students
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 is travel
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, it
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it
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which
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cost
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costs
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for
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apply
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them 52
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pound
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pounds
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.
According to
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 what is shown , the sources of
student
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 income a
student
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loan
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loans
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nearly
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, nearly
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to
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apply
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81 per
cen
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cent
. From the
family
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family,
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it
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they
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 spend the sources of
student
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 income about 70 per
cen
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cent
. The less spending for
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student
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students
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 is grants and funding
and
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, and
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 bank
overdraft
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overdraft,
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it
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which
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 is
near to
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nearly
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 35% and 40% respectively. In terms of monthly
student
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 expenditure for
bills
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bills,
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 it
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cost
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costs
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 69
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pound
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pounds
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, and
other
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others
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it
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apply
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cost
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 91
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pound
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pounds
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words student, cost, pound with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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