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Economic progress is considered a significant factor to measure a country's success. But many people think that other factors should be considered when measuring the success of a country. What other factors do you think measure a country's success? Among these, is one more important than the others?

Economic progress plays
crucial
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 role in the development of
any
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apply
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any nation.
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 many experts on
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 matter argue that it is the most important factor to measure
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 success of a country, I believe that there are many other factors that determine
country's
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a country's
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well being
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. Estimating
nation's
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a nation's
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succes
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success
 relies on a lot of
comlex
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complex
 aspects, including statistical, geographical, and research data.
Goverenments
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Governments
 of many
countries
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 make many efforts to
be developed
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develop
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 in various areas equally. Nations create special unions to support each other in
maintainig
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maintaining
 communities' needs and safety. It is essential for
countries
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 to have reliable and useful partners that can help them to stay against external dangers.
For instance
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, Kazakhstan pay special attention
on
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to
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 creating
diplomatical
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diplomatic
 and
economical
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economic
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 relationships with neighbor
countries
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, being the strongest nation in Central Asia
and
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 always underscores its place
on
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in
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global
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the global
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 arena. It is widely acknowledged that political stability is the key
of
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 social development. It can be measured by many factors - one of
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that
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which
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 is crime rates. Many developed
countries
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 pay special attention to controlling any destructive and potentially dangerous
behavior
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behaviour
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 in their communities. They launch various public awareness campaigns that educate citizens about the importance of local laws and human rights.
To sum up
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, economic progress is not a single factor that can clearly show
country's
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a country's
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overall
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 success
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 there are too many other factors that play
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a crucial
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 role.

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task response
Try to add more strong ideas and give more examples from different places, not only one country.
coherence
Use linking words to show how ideas are connected, such as also, in addition, however, for example, and finally.
grammar
Check spellings and word form so sentences are clear.
grammar
Keep short, simple sentences to help the meaning stay clear.
task response
Answer the question directly by naming the other factors you see and why they matter.
content
The essay shows the idea that money is not the only factor.
structure
There is a clear intro and a short conclusion.
examples
There is some use of an example about a real country.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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