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The overuse of natural resources cause an ultimate exhaust of them. People have been using them to be in swim of new styles such as making new furniture of recent design. This causes a huge harm to the environment. Therefore, the government should discourage people the overuse of this resources. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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 overconsumption, natural
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 are diminishing at an alarming rate. Using them to create fresh designs to sell more, like making new furniture of the same style again and again. As it is negatively affecting the environment.
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 aid to global warming and interferes with weather patterns because of cutting more
trees
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 for raw material. I totally agree with the sentiment that authorities should stop the overuse of
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resources
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 by individuals. Overuse of natural
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 leads to environmental issues , whether it is renewable or non-renewable. Cutting
trees
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 and burning fossil fuels both have negative effects on the environment. Deforestation to obtain firewood for commercial use,
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 as in furniture making , leads to soil erosion.
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 displacement of the upper layer of soil causes long-term degradation of agricultural land, reducing crop yields.
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, the destruction of soil structure increases the risks of flooding. So, policies and laws should be made by the government to discourage people from cutting
trees
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.
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, in many countries majority of
trees
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 are under national protection , which means nobody is allowed to cut
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 under protection.
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, utilising naturally occurring materials in larger amounts increases the climate temperature. When fossil fuels burn, they release greenhouse gases into the atmosphere , which increases the heat in the surroundings.
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,
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 provide a natural cooling effect by absorbing these gases , but people are cutting them down too for their own purposes. In
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 way, it amplifies the process of global warming.
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,
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 WHO, a drastic change in weather temperature has been seen in nations that those done the reforestation. To tackle
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 issue, the government should encourage citizens to participate in planting
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 by the government. To exemplify, in India, the current ruling party , after floods, has made an agenda to motivate people about plantation under the slogan of plant
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, save the earth. In conclusion,
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 the global population is fulfilling its needs through natural
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 but it is harming the environment, and authorities should have taken steps in the form of policies and laws to solve
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 issue.

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task response
Speak in one clear line at the start to show your view, then give reasons.
coherence
Link your ideas with small words like first, next, also, but, therefore.
coherence
Use one idea per paragraph and give a real example that is easy to see how it fits.
grammar
Fix big mistakes in grammar and make short, easy sentences.
lexical
Keep to the topic and use common words.
task response
You show a clear view and you try to give reasons.
examples
You use some real place references as examples.
coherence
You have some order in your writing, with paragraphs.
Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • resources - things we use to live, such as water, wood, metal
  • environment - air, water, land that surround us
  • government - the group of people who lead a country
  • discourage - to make people less willing to do something
  • overuse - use too much
  • waste - use badly or too much, then throw away
  • design - plan how something will look and work
  • furniture - movable objects like chairs, tables for a home
  • harm - bad effect on something
  • policy - a plan or rule made by government
  • law - rule made by government
  • tax - money charged by government on goods or actions
  • ban - to stop something by law
  • recycle - to use again materials after use
  • reuse - use again
  • sustainable - able to keep going for long time without harm
  • pollution - dirty air, water, or land
  • climate - weather pattern over time
  • habitat - the place where animals live
  • industry - business in a field like wood, metal
  • economy - how a country makes and spends money
  • consumer - a person who buys goods
  • business - company that makes or sells goods
  • education - learning about a topic
  • awareness - knowledge about a topic
  • standard - a level that is set for quality
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