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Band 4

An increasing number of professionals, such as doctors and teachers, are leaving their own poorer countries. What problem does this cause? What solutions can you suggest to deal with this situation?

The higher
profesions
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professions
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, like
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,
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 teachers, doctors, and some
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technicians
technecians
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technecians,
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 are trying to leave their own poor countries.
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 has been a major
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a
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developing nations . There are some
considerable
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 problem , and
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 essay will discuss some of the reasons and some proposed solutions. For
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 has been a huge crash for every area in a country. like
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 education, health , and
technical
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the technical
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 sector. If we unfold the reasons for their movement,
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, because they pursue
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better career prospects, high salary
expectation
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expectations
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,
sustainable
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life style
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lifestyle
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, better health care for their families, and
safer
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 environment , because they have already
devorted
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devoted
 a lot
effort
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for
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 their accomplishment . Better career prospects
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 because of the higher opportunities to explore new markets, and
strong
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 economy will create higher wages .
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 higher salaries may produce a path for a quality
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life styles
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lifestyle
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.
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, to stop moving to different countries, responsible authorities should be able to improve some tricks to have
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 appropriate progress on
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 .
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 competitive compensation is the best way
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 reduce
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migration.
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, raising salaries to competitive levels, and not only that, stable the infrastructural
basement
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 to make them good quality
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life styles
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lifestyles
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. As an example ,
can
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 arrange some extra bonuses to develop their lifestyles. In conclusion, by
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increase
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 the professional standards of these careers and
make
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 them a better way of
life
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 with some
mortivation
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motivation
 will be exactly helpful to reduce the ratio of these professional migrations .
consequence
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 of
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 will
increase
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 the level of some sectors
and
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 it will
maintenance
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 the quality of the services and rapidly
increase
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 the number of
profesionalisms
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professionals
 in
like
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,
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healthcare ,
educational
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education
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,
some
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and some
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 technical sectors .

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structure
Plan your answer. Write a short intro, then 2-3 clear ideas, and finish with a short ending.
grammar
Use simple grammar. Check sentence form and spellings. Use short sentences to be clear.
content
Give a small example for each idea to make it clear.
content
You show the task is about a real problem and give a way to solve it.
coherence
There are some linking words to join ideas.
Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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