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The chart belows gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018

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The bar chart illustrates the proportions of weekly earnings spent by families across various categories in a country in 1968 and 2018.
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, in
1968
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1968,
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 food accounted for the largest category,
while
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 leisure activities represented the largest proportion among the other categories in 2018.
However
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, gas and electricity made up the smallest
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share in both years. In 1968, food was the largest category, accounting for 35% of weekly income,
whereas
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 fuel and power were significantly less than food.
Moreover
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, leisure activities made up the highest distribution of approximately 23% of
weekly
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 amount, and fuel made up the lowest proportion of less than 5%.
On the other hand
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, leisure represented the largest portion of weekly income
around
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 20%.
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, housing accounted for the second most expenses after housing
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 a difference of almost 5 % in 2018.
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, fuel and power were the smallest category in the same year. The weekly income spent on household items was shared in both years.

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Vocabulary: The word "represented" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 3 times.
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