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The chart belows gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018

The bar chart illustrates the proportions of weekly earnings spent by families across various categories in a country in 1968 and 2018.
Overall
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, in
1968
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1968,
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 food accounted for the largest category,
while
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 leisure activities represented the largest proportion among the other categories in 2018.
However
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, gas and electricity made up the smallest
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share in both years. In 1968, food was the largest category, accounting for 35% of weekly income,
whereas
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 fuel and power were significantly less than food.
Moreover
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, leisure activities made up the highest distribution of approximately 23% of
weekly
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 amount, and fuel made up the lowest proportion of less than 5%.
On the other hand
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, leisure represented the largest portion of weekly income
around
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 20%.
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, housing accounted for the second most expenses after housing
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 a difference of almost 5 % in 2018.
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, fuel and power were the smallest category in the same year. The weekly income spent on household items was shared in both years.

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Vocabulary: The word "represented" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 3 times.
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