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The maps below show a beachfront area in Australia in 1950 and the same area today. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The maps provide key features about a beachfront area in Australia, the map on the left shows
1950
Correct article usage
the 1950
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 structure,
while
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 the other map shows
current
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the current
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 layout.
Overall
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, there are major transformations occurring, including
main
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the main
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 road expansion connecting
lighthouse
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the lighthouse
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 to the city.
Additionally
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, public facilities increased by adding
restaurant
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restaurants
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 and surf clubs. In 1950, there was a children's playground, dining tables and
pavilion
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a pavilion
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were
Verb problem
apply
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located both near the car parking area and opposite the
water side
Use the right word
waterside
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.
Also
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, two pools with 25cm in depth were in front of the water side. The current development includes the main road
expanded
Verb problem
being expanded
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 to connect the Lighthouse to the city.
Moreover
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, there is an extra car park connected
with
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to
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 the main road. A two-surfing club added to the beach located both near the lighthouse and close to the restaurant.
However
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, there is a change
with
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in
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depth
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the depth
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 of the pool ,which lies near the restaurant
from
Punctuation problem
, from
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 25cm to 50cm.

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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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