The provided pie charts show statistics of granted degrees at the National University from 1990 to 2010.

The given pie charts illustrate the percentages of four different
colleges
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degrees granted at the National University over a
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of twenty years
from
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1990 to 2010.
Overall
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,
computer
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science
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and business courses shared the same distribution at the beginning of the
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,
whereas
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computer
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science
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represented the most dominant degree by the end of the
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. In 1990, business and
computer
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science
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shared more than 50% of the distributed degrees. In terms of students, both courses had an equal number of students
graduated
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in the same year.
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, medicine and law were the least joint courses at 15% and 25% respectively.
On the other hand
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,
computer
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science
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shows a significant
increment
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on
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in
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the granted certificates throughout the
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at
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almost half of the degrees in 2010.
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Furthermore
, medicine and law accounted
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same in both years 1990 and 2010. Business was the only course in which it experienced a decrease of 5% every ten years.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words period, computer, science with synonyms.
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