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Band 5.5

The graph shows the demand for energy and the energy available from fossil fuels in Freedo-nia from 1985 to 2005.

This
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 line graph presents the
data
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 of
energy
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demand
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 and
energy
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 available from 1985 to 2005 in
Freedo-nia
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Freedonia
.
It is clear that
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 the two lines are obviously different, even in the contrary
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. Especially in the year 1995, the
energy
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 available climbed the
highest
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its highest
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while
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energy
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demand
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 fell
down
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apply
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the
lowest
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its lowest
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.
However
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, from 1995 to 2005, the two lines
presents
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present
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 opposite trends. In 1985, the
data
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 of
energy
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demand
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 was 5
unit
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(billion megajoules), a
liitle
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little
 higher than
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energy
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the energy
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demand
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.
Then
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 the following years, the
data
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 of
energy
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 available continually increased
while
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energy
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demand
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 decreased quickly. In 1995, the
data
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 was about 6.5 for
energy
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avaiable
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available
while
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energy
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demand
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 was 2. After 1995, the number of
energy
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avaiable
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available
delined
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declined
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 obviously, and it became 2.5 in 2000.
Then
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 it
kept
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remained
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 stable in the
follow
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following
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yeas
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years
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 until 2005.
By
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On
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contrary
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the contrary
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,
energy
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demand
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 dramatically rose from 1995 to 2005,
it achieve
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reaching
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 7
unit
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units
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words data, energy, demand with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "presents" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 4 times.
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