The graph shows the demand for energy and the energy available from fossil fuels in Freedo-nia from 1985 to 2005.

This
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line graph presents the
data
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of
energy
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demand
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and
energy
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available from 1985 to 2005 in
Freedo-nia
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Freedonia
.
It is clear that
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the two lines are obviously different, even in the contrary
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. Especially in the year 1995, the
energy
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available climbed the
highest
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its highest
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while
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energy
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demand
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fell
down
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the
lowest
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its lowest
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.
However
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, from 1995 to 2005, the two lines
presents
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present
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opposite trends. In 1985, the
data
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of
energy
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demand
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was 5
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(billion megajoules), a
liitle
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little
higher than
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energy
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the energy
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demand
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.
Then
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the following years, the
data
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of
energy
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available continually increased
while
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energy
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demand
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decreased quickly. In 1995, the
data
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was about 6.5 for
energy
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avaiable
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available
while
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energy
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demand
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was 2. After 1995, the number of
energy
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avaiable
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available
delined
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declined
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obviously, and it became 2.5 in 2000.
Then
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it
kept
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remained
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stable in the
follow
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yeas
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years
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until 2005.
By
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contrary
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the contrary
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,
energy
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demand
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dramatically rose from 1995 to 2005,
it achieve
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7
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words data, energy, demand with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "presents" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 4 times.
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