Should old people stay at home or be placed in nursing homes?

Nowadays, the number of old
people
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become
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is becoming
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larger and larger
,
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;
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some elderly
choose
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people choose
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to live in a nursing
home
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,
while
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others prefer
stay
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to stay
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at
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in
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their own
home
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. In my opinion,
stay
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staying
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at
home
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is better.
their
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There
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are many reasons. Living in nursing homes has some benefits, especially those ill
people
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, who can get better
cares
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care
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than staying at
home
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.
However
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, it may not
good
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be good
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for their health. The elderly may have been living
their
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in their
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familia
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family
home
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for many years. Once they leave their
home
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, they may feel lonely and
at
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in
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a low mood every day, which
are
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is
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harmful to their mental
heath
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health
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.
Additionally
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, the condition of nursing homes
are
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is
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not as suitable as their own
home
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, which means the old
peple
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people
may feel
not
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apply
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comfortable
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there, and it is
also
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a drawback
living
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to live
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there.
On the contrary
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, staying at
home
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are
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is
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a better choice for old
people
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.
Firstly
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, they are
familia
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familiar
with the facilities around their
home
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.
For example
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, when they want to buy something, they can go to the supermarket
directerly routher
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directly rather
than checking maps online.
Secondly
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, most of them staying at
home
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are
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apply
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live with their family
and
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, and
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the atmosphere
are
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is
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always warm and lively
which
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, which
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is beneficial for the health of old
people
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. Take an example of a
grantmother
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grandmother
of my friend's, after a few days living in a nursing
home
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, she insisted
to go
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on going
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back to her own
home
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. She believed that she would live longer if she
stay
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stayed
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at
home
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. She wanted
seeing
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to see
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her kids
everday
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every day
, which can make her happier. In conclusion, it depends on different personalities, and I think staying at
home
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is better than
placing
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being placed
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in nursing homes. It has many benefits for
elderly
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the elderly
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.

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language
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coherence
Link ideas with small words. Use connect words like 'and', 'but', 'also', 'for example' to help the flow.
structure
Make the plan clear: first talk about both sides, then give your view, then end with a short conclusion.
examples
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idea
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language
The writer uses 'on the contrary' and 'firstly, secondly' to show order.
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