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Global warming is one of the most serious issues facing the world today. What are some of the causes of global warming? What can governments and individuals do to solve the problem?

In more and more countries,
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 temperature is recorded frequently
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suffering
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causing
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 people
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this
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 situation. There are many reasons for
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 many effects have been associated with it.
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, I believe that several steps
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 improve
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 situation. There are two main factors that
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of
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 global warming. One is burning fossil fuels
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that
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 in most
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countries
particularly
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 associated with industry places is
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 climate change
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 hot weather. When huge factories manufacture something using coal, oil and
others
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 and their
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 rubbish is thrown
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away,
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 water places
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ad
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another
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 trash
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 is called smoke absorbed atmosphere
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. ozone
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ozone
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ozone
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the ozone
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 layer is damaged by these smokes in factories. Another devastating effect is that,
transportation
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in today’s world, most
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vehicles’
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vehicles
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 fuel driving using of petrol.
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, in large cities and towns, most
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citizens become different types of ill like cancer, mostly
heart-disease
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due
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 to
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the produced
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produced smoke
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smoke produced
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from
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 cars.
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, I think there are several measurements can be done by governments can be done by governments, rich people and others.
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government
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 may be an efficient way to produce more electric modes of vehicles
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 these types of factories’ employees
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who
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 are based on
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 think about to discover reducing smoke’s
effect
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effects
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 of
environment
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. In conclusion, it is true that hot weather with its negative impacts
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 is growing at an alarming rate, but it seems to me that there are many solutions to tackle
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structure
Use clear topic sentences and make a simple, logical order of ideas.
language
Check grammar and spelling to make your writing easier to read.
content
Give one or two real examples and explain their impact.
structure
End with a short, direct conclusion that restates your view.
content
The essay shows you understand the topic and tries to give causes and solutions.
structure
There is an introduction and a closing conclusion.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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