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An increasing number of schools provide tablets and laptop computers for students to use in school, replacing books and other printed materials like exams and assignments. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend?

The rising
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 of schools and colleges
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 electronic devices like laptops and tablets for
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 classes,
exciding
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reducing
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 the usage of
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books
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 and printed material in colleges. There are multiple advantages and disadvantages. The increasing range of
Ipad's
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iPads
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 used in
class
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the class
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 environment is simply
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distracting
students
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.
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 there are multiple
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benefits
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materials
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. The
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amount
 of
knowladge
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knowledge
 that could possibly be uploaded
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 laptops
are
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 much more than
,
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 thick
books
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 used in lessons. It improves the
accesability
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accessibility
 to matters in
school
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the school
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 environment. The prepared files increase the speed to find the
relevent
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relevant
 page. In effect, the
handeling
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handling
 of physical
books
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 is
serriously
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seriously
 harming
students
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. The
waight
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weight
 of the
books
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to
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 extreme to take
every where
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.
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 the benefits of electronics, there are multiple
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 factors of being exposed to UV light constantly. It increases the rate of visual
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diseases
 among the
students
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asspecially
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especially
 in primary groups. The injuries
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caused
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screen
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the screen
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is un
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doable
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.
This
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 can be
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promoted
 by using
books
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 in education.
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, nowadays it is really easy to
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access
 the
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unnecessary
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 programs through
internet
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the internet
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 during lectures.
However
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,
this
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 can be a major situation that blocks others
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consantrate
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concentrating
 as well. In conclusion, both materials are quite helpful. In each
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 there are
adventages
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advantages
 and
disadventages
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disadvantages
. The most
importent
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important
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students
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students'
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 comfort and health. The school heads must pick the best option
which
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 will benefit education and health at the same time. Even
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though
, the lack of
consantration
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concentration
 is a huge problem
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caused
 by leptops. It must still
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 in
educaltion
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education
.

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content
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language
Use small and correct spelling. Fix big errors.
cohesion
Link ideas with simple and common words like and, but, also, so to show how ideas go with each other.
structure
End with a short conclusion that sums up your view.
content
You show some idea of both sides of the topic.
structure
You have an intro and a closing idea.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Interactive learning
  • Educational resources
  • Digital materials
  • Environmental sustainability
  • Carbon footprint
  • Investment
  • Distraction
  • Equality
  • Technology access
  • Technical issues
  • Prolonged use
  • Eye strain
  • Posture
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