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The table illustrate how much projects are costing in American dollars for West Africa, Central America and South east Asia to sustainable forestry for over the next five years

Given pie
carth
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chart
 above shows the number of projects are priced in American
dollars
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 for the reference of West Africa, Central America and
South east
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Southeast
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 Asia for constant plantation
for
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apply
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over the given five years.
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, the projected
expenditury
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expenditure
 in
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year
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the year
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 is shown on
pie
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a pie
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chard
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chart
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. Salaries consume half of the budget
which
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, which
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 is 50%.
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, office expenses are the least coasted element
with
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, with
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being
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apply
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the same
as
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cost as
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 the money for training purposes
which
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, which
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 are 10% each. Set up costs
,
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apply
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 are significantly
highest
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higher
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 after salaries with consuming
the
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apply
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30% of the
walet
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wallet
.
Thus
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, in
year
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 1
West
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, West
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Africas
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Africa's
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 expenses are
exact
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exactly
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 10.5
million
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dollars
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which
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, which
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 is the highest of all times for
this
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 geography
, after
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. After
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the
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apply
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2
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years
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year
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year,
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 there is a
dramatical
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dramatic
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 fall from 7.5
million
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dollars
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 to 2.5
before
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million before
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 the 1
million
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 increase in
5th
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the 5th
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year
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.
However
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, Central America
is
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has
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 constantly
decreasing
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decreased
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the
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its
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 expenditure over the years
,
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;
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 the money fell from 20
million
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 to 12
million
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 after a
year
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.
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, stabilising at 5
million
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dollars
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 for the rest. South-east Asia is the only
money
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region with
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 increasing
region
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money
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. starting with 30
million
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then
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, then
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 a minor fall to 20
million
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dollars
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, and gradually rising to 50
million
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dolars
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dollars
 in conclusion.
To sum up
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, the graph shows two budget decreases in 5
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year
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5-year
 period and
a
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an
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 increasing budget region.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 65%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words dollars, year, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 3 times.
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