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The bar charts give information about the salaries and university fees of students from three universities in two spheres: Law and Business. Summatise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant

The given bar graphs illustrate the
different
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differences
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of
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in
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 average salaries of
university
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 students and their
tuition
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fees
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 in thousands of
dollars
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 from three universities in two spheres,
as well as
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 Law and Business.
Overall
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, the number of
Salary
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 and
Tuition
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fees
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 witnessed a significant fluctuation from three universities in two spheres. It can
see
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be seen
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 from the graphs, the data
of
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on
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tuition
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fees
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 more higher than
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salary
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the salary
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.
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besides
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, the figure for
tuition
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fees
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 of
university
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B
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 in
Law
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the Law
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 sphere and
university
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C
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 in
Business
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the Business
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 sphere are
highest
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the highest
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,
while
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 the opposite is true in
university
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 A in
two
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the two
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 spheres. In
term
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terms
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 of
,
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apply
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 the number of
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salary
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salaries
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 from
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university
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universities
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 A and
B
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 in
Law
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the Law
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 sphere of 40
thousand
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dollars
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, but
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university
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the university
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 only of over 35
thousand
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dollars
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.
Besides
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, the statistic of
tuition
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fees
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 of
university
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 A
has
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are
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 40
thousand
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dollar
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dollars
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, there was
an
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apply
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university
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B
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 has 60
thousand
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dollars
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and
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, and
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university
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C
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 has approximately 55
thousand
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dollars
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. Regarding the figure for
salary
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 from
university
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 A
has
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is
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 30
thousand
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dollars
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, there
was
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were
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an
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apply
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university
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universities
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B
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 and
C
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 have 40
thousand
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dollars
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. Ultimately, the
statistic
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statistics
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 of
tuition
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fees
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 from three
univerties
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universities
raise is
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are
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university
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 A,
B
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, and
C
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respectively
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, respectively
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45
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, 45
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, 50,
60
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and 60
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thousand
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dollars
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "besides".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words university, tuition, fees, dollars, salary, b, c, thousand with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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