The graph gives information about the consumoption of fast food (in grams per week), in the UK from 1970 to 1990

The line graph illustrates the
infromation
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information
about how many
grams
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of hamburgers, fish and chips and pizza that were eaten in the United Kingdom between 1970 and 1990.
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, it can be seen that both hamburgers and fish with chips showed an upward trend,
while
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the pizza had a gradual decline
moving
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, moving
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from the most consumed food per week to
least
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the least
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.
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the beginning of the period, about 300
grams
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of pizza
was
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were
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consumed in a week.
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this
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, the figure decreased steadily to its lowest number of 200
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by 1985 before slightly increasing to about 210
grams
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per
seven days
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week
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. Meanwhile, the consumption of fish and chips had been growing throughout the period, so
,
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apply
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by the
last
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year, it
rose in five
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had risen
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times.
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, hamburgers had a similar pattern. From less than 50
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a week, it edged up to nearly
above
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100
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before tripling sharply.

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