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Band 3

n some countries, a few people earn extremely high salaries. Some people think that this is good for a country, while others believe that the government should control salaries and limit the amount people can earn. Discuss both sides and express your opinion.

People
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's earnings are subject
discussed
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 among
people
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 in some countries, rather
it
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should
be
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 regulated by authorities,
while
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 others believe it is
benefit
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beneficial
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 for the
country
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 and individual
level
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. In my opinion,
people
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 should take what they deserve and enhance the economic status of their
country
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. On the one hand, some may argue that different classes in society appear
and
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number
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the number
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 of poor
people
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,
low
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the lower
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 class
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apply
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level
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, and
middle
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the middle
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 class will increase if it is not regulated by authorities.
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this
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 reason, they believe
if
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that if
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 laws and regulations are implemented, poverty will decrease over time and
economic
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the economic
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level
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 of society will be improved.
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, enforcing a limit
for
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on
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 higher salaries will decrease the difference between rich and poor
people
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. Another example, it will decrease the
purchases
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purchase
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 price
and
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 so poor
people
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 can buy their food without any help.
On the other hand
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, it is advantageous for the
country
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 on
individual
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an individual
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level
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.
In addition
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, receiving a good salary will increase the productivity and creativity of the workers, knowing their effort is not wasted and will be paid back.
Moreover
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,
people
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 should earn what they deserve.
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, a worker in
medical
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the medical
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 field will spend a 24-hour shift
and
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, and
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 the other worker in
office
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the office
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 workplace will spend 8 hours only
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; thus
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thus
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thus,
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 it is unfair if they receive the same salary. In conclusion, I believe that the economic status of the
country
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 is not connected to
salaries
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the salaries
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 of
people
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, and a salary should depend on
worker's
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the worker's
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 efforts and productivity
level
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.

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improvement
Use a clear opening sentence that says the topic and your view.
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Begin each paragraph with a line that shows its main point and keep one idea in each paragraph.
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Check your grammar and make short sentences to be easy to read.
strength
Your essay shows both sides and ends with a clear view.
strength
You use linking words like 'On the one hand' and 'In conclusion'.
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Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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