The table below gives information about the population of New Zealand between 2011 and 2012

The data shown in the table compares information about the different age groups of citizens dwelling in New Zealand in 2011 and 2012.
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, the total number of people who lived in New Zealand increased marginally by the end of the period.
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, those aged 15-39 remained the highest
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the year. In 2011, the total
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of people living in New Zealand was 4.400.000.
This
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figure saw a
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rise, ending the period with 4.460.000 in 2012.
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, the youngest age group went from 801.750 in 2011 to 800.000 in 2012. Those aged between 15 and 39
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followed the same trend, starting the year with 1.520.000
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declining to 1500.000 in the final year.
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, the older age groups 40-64 and over 65 years old witnessed a slight increase over the
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period. In 2011, people who were between the ages of 40 and 64 were 1.400.000
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those 65+ were 500.000. These figures rose substantially, finishing at 1.460.000 and 900.000, respectively.

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