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Band 4

The bar chart below shows the total number of Olympic medals won by twelve different countries.

The bar
chat
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 represented the number of Olympic
medals
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 won by twelve different countries.
Overall
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, it was clear that the USA had the highest figure in Olympic
meadals
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medals
 won,
while
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 Japan had the smallest. As can be seen
feom
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from
 the chart, the USA represented the highest amount at about 2300 in different
medals
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.
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, Japan had the lowest figure, at only about 380 in different
medals
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. The
amount
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number
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 of Soviet Union was
also
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 notable, standing at 1000 in different
medals
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. Regarding the other categories, the UK amounted to about 700 in different
medals
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, which was higher
that
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 of France, Germany, Italy, Sweden, Australia, Hungary, East Germany and China.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words medals with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "represented" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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