You have recently started work in a new company. Write a letter to an English-speaking friend. In your letter, - Explain why you changed jobs. - Describe your new job. - Tell him / her your other news.

Dear Sam, How are you doing, my friend? I am writing
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letter to happily announce that I have recently joined Deloitte as a Technical Consultant. As you already know, in my previous role at the Bank of Nova Scotia, I was feeling stuck. The work was monotonous
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the new policy required all the employees to work from the office. I wanted a role where I could learn new skills and have an opportunity to grow.
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, the work-from-home set-up suits me the best.
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really motivated me to look out for new roles. My new job requires me to learn technologies like Machine Learning, Artificial Intelligence, and Natural Language Processing , which is really exciting.
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, it's a client-facing role where I get to interact with people from different backgrounds and cultures.
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, I have some news to share. Raghav proposed to me , and I am getting married! I have been waiting for
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moment and want to invite you to our wedding. I can't wait to meet you and share all the details. See you soon and lots of love!

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task response
Task response: Your letter covers all parts. To be stronger, keep one main idea in each paragraph and finish each idea with a short line.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Use linking words well and split long ideas. Put each big idea in its own paragraph or sentence.
tone
Friendly tone and clear aim.
organization
Good use of linking words like Moreover and Furthermore.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • career opportunities
  • job satisfaction
  • work environment
  • responsibilities
  • role
  • team dynamics
  • company culture
  • professional growth
  • transition
  • colleagues
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