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In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history oft h e house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this?

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 we will discuss about people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of
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 a house or building their own
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 I will give my opinion on that. First of renting or buying a house is more useful for some people who don't want to spend
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planning for each
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working overseas in diplomatic relations
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 as my husband.
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 he bought
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 property
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 we designed the interior
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 it's done.
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, building a new house will give you the full experience of the materials that
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 for your property
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 you will choose the best
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 your budget
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 about the situation of
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 life. In the end, in my opinion, it depends
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 each family and their situation.

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content
The essay does not answer the task. Talk about why people want to know the history of the home and how to find this history, with clear steps.
structure
Make a clear intro that states the topic and your plan; end with a short, simple conclusion.
language
Use simple, short sentences and common words; avoid long routes of idea.
content
Add specific and real steps for finding out history (for example, ask old owners, go to local records, look in the library, search online)
structure
There is an introduction and a conclusion
content
The writer uses a personal link to the topic
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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