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The internet has changed the world and how people live today. Give the advantages and disadvantages of the internet.

The
Internet
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 is a very different place today. It
is
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has
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, and
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people
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people's
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 lives.
This
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Internet
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.
One
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 the one hand, these days
people
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 are
benifit
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benefiting
ans
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and
advantage
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taking advantage
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 of the
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.
First,
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it is
amaizing
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amazing
 for
searchs
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searches
 of
informations
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information
, it is faster than books.
Thay
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They
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 can reach
to
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what looking for in
minuts
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minutes
.
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, students can study easily with
searchs
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searches
 on
website
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the website
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.
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an
entetaiment
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entertainment
 online was a wide range.
People
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 can play video games with
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their
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frinds
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friends
 in
far
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a way. More
that
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than that
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, they can listen to
tha
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the
 music,
whatch
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watch
movie
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a movie
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 and
communicates
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communicate
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 with
famely
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family
 and
frinds
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friends
.
Third,
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the
Internet
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 is great for business online. Anybody can shop on
website
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the website
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 at any time.
Althugh
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Although
 they can make a home business
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online.
In these
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days
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days,
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 the
Internet
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 is most important for everybody
On the other hand
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, there are some
disadvantage
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disadvantages
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.
First,
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people
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wests
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waste
 their
times
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time
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 by
set
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setting
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 on the
Internet
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. They lose
the
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apply
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time
on
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apply
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playing games,
sopping
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shopping
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 or
watch
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watching
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 movies. In
addision
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addition
, looking at the screen or phone for a
while
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 may be harmful to the eyes.
Second,
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there are
people
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 who
called
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are called
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 Huckers. The Huckers are looking for
who
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those who
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 have money to steal.
Also
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, they look to steal
e-mals ans
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e-mails and
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accunts
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accounts
 to
huck
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hack
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 it.
Third,
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bad
people
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 are
wide range
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widespread
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 in the
communicated
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communication
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meida
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media
. There are negative
peaple
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people
 who talk about culture.
Also
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, they are
worst
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worse
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to give
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at giving
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 any advice that disappointment
to
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apply
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any one
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anyone
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that
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who
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lesten
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listens
 to them. In conclusion, it is clear to see the
internet
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 has many advantages
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;
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Howeever
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however
, it
also
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 has some
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disadvantages
by
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due to
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pisonal
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personal
used
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use
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.

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structure
Plan what you will say. Make one clear idea in each part. Use a simple plan: intro, points, then conclusion.
coherence
Use clear topic sentence in each paragraph. Keep to one big idea per paragraph. Use simple linking words like first, next, also, but.
content
Give real examples and explain them. Do not repeat the same idea.
content
The essay shows the topic and tries to explain the good and bad sides.
content
There are some real ideas about how the Internet helps in search and in buying online.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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