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Many schools today use uniforms for their students. Some people say that this is a great idea. Others meanwhile say that this is not a good idea for the students. Give the advantages and disadvantages of school uniforms

Socitey
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Society
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 that includes .
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Schools
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School
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uniforms
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 are used in many
schools
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. Some people think they are a good idea because they create equality among
students
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,
while
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 others believe they limit
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students
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students'
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 freedom.
This
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 topic discusses the advantages and disadvantages of
school
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uniforms
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. On the one hand,
There
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 are many advantages of
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school
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a school
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uniform
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.
To begin
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 with,
school
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uniforms
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 make all
students
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 look the same.
Students
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 are less likely to judge each other by
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clothes
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their clothes
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.
Such
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 as
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apply
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uniforms
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 help create a fair environment for learning.
Secondly
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, wearing a
uniform
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 teaches kids to follow rules. Teenagers learn to be responsible for their appearance.
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,
uniforms
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 help
childrens
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children
 develop good habits at
school
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.
Third,
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uniforms
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 save time in the morning because
students
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 do not need to choose
clothes
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. Kids can get ready faster and arrive home at
school
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 on time.
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, wearing a
uniform
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 helps
students
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 keep their
clothes
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 simple and neat.
ON the other hand
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,
their
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there
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 are many disadvantages of
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schools
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school
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uniforms
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First,
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students
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 cannot wear the
clothes
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 they like.
Uniforms
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 do not let
students
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 show their personality. Like, some
students
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 feel unhappy because of the
uniform
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 rules.
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, some
uniforms
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 are too tight or made from rough material. Teenagers can feel hot in summer and cold in winter. To give you an idea,
uncomfortuble
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uncomfortable
clothes
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 make it hard to focus in class.
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, buying
school
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uniforms
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 can be expensive for families. Some
schools
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 require special shoes or accessories
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 which can
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 be expensive for poor families. Like, families may spend more money
than
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 normal
clothes
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. In conclusion ,
school
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uniforms
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 have both advantages and disadvantages. They help kids feel equal, disciplined , and
organized
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but
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 they can
also
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 limit freedom, be uncomfortable , and cost money.
Overall
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,
schools
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 should think carefully before deciding to make
uniforms
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 mandatory.

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coherence
Use clear links to join ideas. Use simple connectors like first, also, but, because, so.
organization
Plan before you write: include an intro, two body parts for pros and cons, and a simple conclusion with your view.
grammar
Check spelling and grammar: fix common errors like squint words, 'uncomfortable', capitalization.
content
The essay gives both sides and ends with a view.
structure
There are good ideas like saving time in the morning.
Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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