The chart below shows the percentage of people accessing news via different media in one country in 2013, 2015, and 2017. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar graph gives information about different ways of accessing news preferred by people in three different years.
Overall
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,
while
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there were certain
media
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that had a falling trend
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, such
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as newspapers and radio, the internet showed the most amount of increase during the period.
Whereas
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television
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didn't fit into any of the two categories as it fluctuated. The types of
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that decreased over the years were newspapers and radio. Newspapers showed a very stable fall
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, starting
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with over 40% in 2013 and going down by 10% in 2015 and by more than 5% in 2017, as it was a little above 20%. Radio made a very slight drop from just above 30% in 2013 to exactly 30% in 2015 and remained the same
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2015 in 2017. In
general
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general,
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these two were the
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preferred ways to access the
media
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. There were certain
media
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that showed a rising trend
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such
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, such
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as the internet. Started in 2013 with nearly 30% and rose
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by 10% in 2015.
Then
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by
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, by
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the year 2017 made a drastic jump
reaching
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, reaching
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almost 70%.
Although
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we can see that
television
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made a slight rise from 2015 to 2017 by going from less than 70% to a little over 70%, it wasn’t a consistent increase
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, as
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between the years 2013 and
2015
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2015,
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television
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went down by over 10%. So it’s clear that
television
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fluctuated
instead
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of having a stable change.
Finally
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, the
overall
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most preferred tool to access news was
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television
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television,
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followed by the internet.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall, such".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Contractions: Don't use contractions.
Vocabulary: Replace the words media, television with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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