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The pie chart shows the main reason why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these cause affected three regions of the world during the 1990s.

The graphs show why the productivity of
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the earth
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earth
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Earth
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 dropped in North America, Europe and Oceania in the 1990s.
Overal
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, over-grazing was the main reason
of
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for
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 degrading
land
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, and Europe degraded farmland the most
while
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 North America contributed the least. Over-grazing was the major cause of making farmland less productive and caused 35% of
land
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degradaton
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degradation
, which was 5% higher than the second cause of
land
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 degradation, deforestation, and 7% greater than the third major reason, over-cultivation. Causing the largest proportion of nearly 1/4 of
area
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the area
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 degraded, Europe harm nearly 10% of farmland by deforestation, 8% by over-cultivation and 5.5% by over-grazing.
On the other hand
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, North America caused the least
land
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 degradation at only 5%, which was mainly
due to
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 deforestation , and
oceanis
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oceans
having
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 no degradation by
over-cultivaton
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over-cultivation
,
caused
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causing
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 a moderate rate at 13% mainly from
over- grazing
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over-grazing
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words land with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • agricultural land
  • productivity
  • over-grazing
  • soil erosion
  • vegetation damage
  • deforestation
  • removal of trees
  • loss of nutrients
  • water cycle
  • land degradation
  • over-cultivation
  • planting crops
  • soil recuperation
  • nutrient depletion
  • impacts
  • regions
  • livestock farming
  • sustainable
  • intensive farming practices
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