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Band 4.5

The plans below show the site of a farm in 1950 and the same site today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps illustrate the transformations of Beechwood
Farm
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 between 1950 and today.
Overall
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, the Beechwood
Farm
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 has changed many
areas
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 since 1950. The sheep area of livestock was located in the left-hand corner in 1950;
however
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, the site of sheep was converted into multiple
areas
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 , which include two parking
areas
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, a camping field, and solar panels. In the past, the track, which separated the two
areas
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 from the top right-hand and the bottom left-hand, was situated in the middle of the map in 1950, but now it has been transformed into the main road.
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, the crop
areas
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, which included the fruit trees, soft fruits and vegetables, have been situated to the southwest of the map since 1950;
however
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, a new
farm
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 shop has been erected in a corner of the fruit trees in the present. The barn was demolished from the west side ,and now it is rebuilt on the south side, which is near the road.
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, except for the barn area, the fields of the farmhouse and chickens were located on the southeast side from 1950 to
today
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the present
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. So,
it is clear that
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 the Beechwood
Farm
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 has changed many places since 1950.

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task response
Use a clear plan: first say what you will tell, then tell it in two or three big parts, and finish with a short end line.
task response
Make the intro a short paraphrase of the map. Then list main changes in two groups, if you can.
coherence and cohesion
Keep to one idea per sentence. Use simple link words like 'and', 'but', 'also', 'then' to join ideas.
coherence and cohesion
Check mark the maps: say 'in 1950' and 'today' each time you name a change. Do not mix places.
task response
Watch for wrong fact or wrong order. Be clear what changes are made to which part.
strength
The essay tries to give a lot of detail about what changed.
strength
It uses natural contrast words like 'in 1950' and 'today' to show change.
strength
There is a clear overall idea at the start.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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