The pie chart shows the main reason why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these cause affected three regions of the world during the 1990s.

The pie chart
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information about the main cause why
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agriculture
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has declined in
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. The table chart illustrates how these causes had made an impact on three parts of the world in the 1990s.
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, we can see that overgrazing had the highest percentage of damage,
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the other sources of land degradation had the lowest.
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it is clear that
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Europe had been affected the most among the regions shown.
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the data given,
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land degradation around the world are four. Over-grazing had affected 35% of the
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deforestation impacted 30%. As for over-cultivation and other causes, they had 28% and 7%, respectively.
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, North America was the least affected by land degradation; all of the causes' effects did not surpass 5%. As for Europe, they suffered from deforestation the most, which had a 9.8% impact,
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over-cultivation was 7.7% and over-grazing was 5.5%. As for Oceania, they did not suffer from over-cultivation in that period;
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, they experienced over-grazing the most, which had 11.3,
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deforestation was 1.7.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas, while".
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • agricultural land
  • productivity
  • over-grazing
  • soil erosion
  • vegetation damage
  • deforestation
  • removal of trees
  • loss of nutrients
  • water cycle
  • land degradation
  • over-cultivation
  • planting crops
  • soil recuperation
  • nutrient depletion
  • impacts
  • regions
  • livestock farming
  • sustainable
  • intensive farming practices
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