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Writing Samples
Band 1

Technology has changed the way people communicate. Is this a positive or negative impact

It is increasingly more and more popular in the world to communicate
technologies
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technological
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 development.
This
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 change
have
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has
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 both
sides
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apply
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negative
or
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and
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 positive
.
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effects.
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 But it has more positive sides.
Firstly
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,technology
make
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makes
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 communication easy and fast.
People
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 can call
own
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their own
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 family
for
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from
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another
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other
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 cities.
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Therefore
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Therefore,
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 friends can phone,
messages
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message
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,or video call.
This
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help
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helps
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 students study online
and
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, and
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 workers do
own
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their own
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 jobs from home. We can talk to
people
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 in other countries. Students can study online and talk teacher.
Secondly
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,
people
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 sometimes use
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their phone
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phone
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phones
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 so much.
For instance
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, messages on the internet
is
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are
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 harmful, because we cannot see
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the feeling
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feeling
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feelings
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 and body language. Sometimes messages are not clear. They less to talk
face to face
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less face-to-face
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. In conclusion, technology has changed communication a lot. It
make
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makes
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 life easier and faster, but it can
also
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 cause
problem
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problems
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.
People
Use synonyms
 could use technology in
good
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a good
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grammar
Fix spelling and grammar. For example: 'Technology makes' not 'technology make', and 'has' not 'have'.
language use
Use short, simple sentences. Each idea can be in one line to be easy to read.
structure
Have a clear plan: intro, two body parts, and a conclusion.
coherence
Link ideas with easy words like 'and', 'but', 'also' to move from one idea to the next.
task response
Give a little fact or example to back each point so your view is clear.
content
There is a clear view that tech has more good sides.
structure
Some order words like 'First' and 'Second' show a plan.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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