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Some people believe that reading printed books is more valuable for learning than using digital resources, while others think online materials are more effective. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

In the modern era, education is
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 important part of life. There are two
resources
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 available for reading,
one
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 is printed
books
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other
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the other
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 is online materials. Some mobs think that
read
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reading
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 from printed
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 is more effective, but others oppose it. I will discuss both views and my perspective in the upcoming paragraphs. To
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, there are numerous reasons which
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show
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 that printed
books
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 for learning are more efficient. First and foremost, people can
do
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more focus
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focus more
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 and concentrate on
study
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their studies
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 rather than
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being distracted
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 by any messages or
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calls
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 on digital
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 because anybody can easily
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be distracted
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with
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the
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apply
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text
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texts
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 or
call
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calls
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.
For example
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, during
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, students were attending class online
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 most of the scholars just joined the class and put
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the class
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 on mute and same time, they were playing games on the same screen or
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watching
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 movies. So, students can
more concentrate
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concentrate more
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 on
study
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 with the help of printed
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.
On the other hand
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, there are tremendous causes which
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describe
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 digital
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 are more valuable.
Firstly
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, it is very convenient
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just with
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one
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 click, people can find any
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 online
as well
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as
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and
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 nobody
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needs
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 to carry of
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books
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book
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 bag because nowadays everyone
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 their own phone or laptop, so they can learn anytime and anywhere on their cell phone.
Furthermore
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, some
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 are really expensive
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, and
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 enough explanation is not available in
one
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book
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, but with the help of online materials, people can search
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one
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book
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but
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 that
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write
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 down by different authors. That's why
,
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apply
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 online
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 are
convient
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convenient
 and not
waste
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a waste
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 of time to find
books
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 in
store
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a store
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 or library. In conclusion, I think digital material
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 effective and efficient because it helps to save time and
enough
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provides enough
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 explanation available on
google
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Google
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,
chatgpt
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ChatGPT
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 or
wikipedia
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Wikipedia
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 about any topic. So, it is really convenient.

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structure
Plan your ideas before you write. A clear plan helps your essay go well.
introduction conclusion
Make a clear intro that says your view and what you will say. End with a short conclusion that repeats your view.
coherence
Use linking words to show order: first, next, also, but, however, in addition.
content
Give more facts or proof for each point. Use real or simple examples.
grammar
Be careful with word choice. Use plain and correct English.
task response
Make sure you compare two sides and give your view clearly.
content
The essay tries to show both sides and give a view.
language
Link words are used to show contrast and order.
content
The message is about how reading helps learning.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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