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The graph below gives information about the price of bananas in four countries between 1994 and 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisions where relevant.

This
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 report derives from the listed line graph, which depicts the
price
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 of
bananas
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 differed across four
countiries
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countries
since
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from
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 1994 to 2004. By and large, it can be seen that
bananas
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 in Japan experienced the highest
price
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 rate.
While
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 Germany and the US had shown a steady trend to the end of the course, the
price
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on
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bananas
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 in France almost returned to its initial rates. Even though, in spite of the decent fluctuations at the very beginning and
at the end
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 of the course for all, the
price
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 went up only for Japan and France, and Germany and the US
comprised
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experienced
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the
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a
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deep
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significant decline
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 compared to others. Precisely, the
price
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 increase in Japan
on
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for
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bananas
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 took one decade by $2.50,
making up
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reaching
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the
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its
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 peak
amid
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among
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 all the listed countries. France's trend on
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price
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the price
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 of
bananas
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 copied the former state, but with
less
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fewer
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 oscillations
at
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in
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 the first 5 years, returning to
the almost
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almost the
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 same
price
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 of around $1.70
to
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in
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 2004.
Instead
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, the US and
Germany
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German
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 prices
demostrated
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demonstrated
 an
oposite
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opposite
 and a steady drift of
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price
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prices
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. To be exact, from roughly $0.70 and nearly $1.50 to around $1.10 and a sharp $1, respectively.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words price, bananas with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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