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Band 2

Nowadays some people are changing their way of look through hair colour, clothes cosmetics and even plastic operations. What are the reasons? Is it a good or bad thing?

Human surgeries are going out of hand nowadays.
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 are spending huge chunks of
money
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 to transform themselves into different personalities. The definite reason for
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 trend is that
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individuals want to look good and impress other humans. I personally believe that
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 change is badly affecting the
econommy
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economy
 in terms of
money
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 and public relations. The first and
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foremost reason
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 change is affecting the pockets directly.
People
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 are spending
lot
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a lot
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 of
money
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 to buy branded products , expensive clothes
not
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, not
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 only to look rich but to make other
people
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 jealous.
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 tend to
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 about the things they
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don't
 have
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, and
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then
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than
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than,
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 in order to impress the other
person
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person,
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expulsive
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compulsive
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 shopping is done.
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, society norms and status
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 become the key
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 to
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scenerio
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scenario
. Individuals like to be friends with the person who has
money
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 or who is
good looking
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good-looking
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. No one wants to be in touch with the person who
doesnot
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does not
 meet the society standards.
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,
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 trend is
going
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 out of hand. Not only
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people are
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are people
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 becoming poor
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, but
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also
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 becoming mentally sick.
People
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 tend to copy celebrities .

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task response
Plan your essay. Start with a short intro that states the topic and your view. Then give two clear ideas, each in its own paragraph. End with a short conclusion that restates your view.
coherence
Use easy links like and, but, also to connect ideas. Put one idea in each paragraph. Make sure the end of a paragraph links to the next.
coherence
Give simple facts or clear examples to back what you say. Avoid big claims without proof.
task response
Clear view is stated in basic form.
coherence
Two main ideas are given for why people change how they look.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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