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In recent year, online education is becoming more and more popular. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this phenomeneon? Use specific details and examples to explain your opinion.

These days,studying through online courses
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 rapidly
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, especially
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due to
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 technological development and global events.
While
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 online offers several clear benefits, it
also
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 presents several drawbacks that cannot be ignored. Flexible
time
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 schedule is the main
advatage
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advantage
 of studying
virtual
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virtually
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. Digital courses always have
feature
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a feature
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 to choose the
time
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 of the
lesson
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, meaning that if you are not able to go to the internet, you can change the
time
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 by informing your teacher 1-2 hours before the
lesson
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.
For instance
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, it is popular among young moms to use these
kind
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kinds
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od
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of
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 courses, because if they
are
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apply
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stay late at work or have problems with
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the baby
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baby
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baby,
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 they can switch the
lesson
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for
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to
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more
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a more
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comfortable
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convenient
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time
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.
As a result
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,
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wont
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won't
 expire under any
circumstanses
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circumstances
Unfortunetaly
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Unfortunately
, there is no true learning
atmospere
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atmosphere
 in web-based classes. There are several factors which differ
face-to-face
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between face-to-face
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 study with virtual one.
Student
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The student
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couldnt
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couldn't
 fully concentrate on
subject
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the subject
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while
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 there
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are
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 sometimes internet connection errors or
advertisments
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advertisements
pop-up
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pop up
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.
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Also
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 only modern computer devices can illustrate the image and voice of your tutor. There is
a
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apply
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research conducted on
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the efficency
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efficency
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efficiency
 of training by computer and classroom learning where students were practised with the same teacher for 1 month. By the end of the month group which studied through face-to-face passed the test with
hiegher
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higher
 results compared to those who studied online. In conclusion,
although
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online based
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online-based
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 learning offers flexibility in terms of
time
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, factors like internet connection or overpriced equipment
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make
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 face-to-face learning
stiil
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still
 alive.

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Plan before you write. Start with a short view of the good and bad points, then end with your own view.
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Add one clear example for each point and keep it simple.
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Use linking words to show how ideas go from one to the next, like also, but, however, then.
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Make the essay in three parts: simple intro, two body parts, a short end.
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Check for big spelling and grammar mistakes and fix easy ones first.
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The writer shows some view on both sides of the topic.
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There are real examples in the text to show points.
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The ending uses a clear 'In conclusion' line.
Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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