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Writing Samples
Band 3.5

Being a celebrity- such as famous film star or sports personality - brings problems as well as benefits. Do you think that being a celebrity has more benefits or more problems?

If a person is a famous actor or a
sports man
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, he has pros as well
cons
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as cons
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of
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to
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 his reputation. In my opinion, being a celebrity is more
benificial
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beneficial
 than problematic.
Firstly
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,
celebrities
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has
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have
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 extra love from
public
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the public
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. A person who is a
wellknown
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well-known
 film star or athlete will be loved
from
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by
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 other
persons
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people
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,
for
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not only for
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 their abilities, by they are famous. Love and respect from
the
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apply
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other people is
the one of
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one of the
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 most precious things in the world.
For example
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, Ranaldo is a football player. He is loved in
whole
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the whole
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 world for
excellent
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his excellent
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 performance and his ability to jump
high
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higher
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 than average.
Secondly
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,
celebrities
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 get many free gifts from different
luxary
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luxury
 brands, which are unaffordable for
middle class
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middle-class
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 persons. They get these many things just for free, in
return
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return,
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 they just have to carry these items in front of cameras or on their social media. These PR
pakages
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packages
 are beneficial for both
,
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apply
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celebrities
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 as well brands.
Celebrities
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 enjoy free
luxary
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luxury
 items and
brand
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brands
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 enjoy publicity
of
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for
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 their items.
For instance
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,
last
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 year a cartoon named
as
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apply
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Labubu
become
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became
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 very
trandy
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trendy
 because many famous personalities used it as
hanging
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a hangover
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 along their pants or bags. In conclusion,
their
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there
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 are many problems for them
like
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, like
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 their private life is disturbed
but
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, but
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 their benefits
outweight
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outweigh
 their problems. They enjoy
most
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the most
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valueable
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valuable
 thing
love
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, love
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 from local people.
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Moreover
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Moreover,
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 they get financial
benfits
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benefits
 from different brands because they are famous.

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task response
Plan what you want to say first. Make a short plan before you write.
content
Give strong examples that fit your idea and fix wrong facts.
grammar
Use simple and clear sentences. Try to keep ideas short.
grammar
Check the spelling of names and key words so they read well.
coherence
Use linking words to join ideas well, like also, but, and for example.
content
Your view is clear: fame brings both good and bad.
structure
There is an intro, body, and end.
content
Examples are used to back up ideas.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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