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Social media has taken over the entire world, with even the remotest area having an access to internet and social networking. But its advancement has resulted in teenagers being granted greater access to internet which can lead to potentially harmful concequences. This essay will discuss the possible solutions for this problem.

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 was the worst or best thing that has happened in
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 essay will show the full picture of the advantages of social
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 and the
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disadvantages
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wastes our
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 many people, or perhaps all of us, would consider that social
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 kills
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 it does not. In fact, social
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 is the most brilliant thief that can steal our
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 without anyone noticing.
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, internet addicts need to be present at the moment and be less on their phones so they save themselves earlier.
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, the problem gets worse when it comes to teenagers facing the bad effects of social
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. At
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 point, it gets dramatically worse
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because
 young people are not
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educated
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 they have to learn about history all the way up.
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 shows one of the main problems and the effective solution at the same
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. In conclusion, even though social
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 has a whole package of drawbacks, it still does not define the background of the advantages. One of the plot twists social
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 still hard for scientists to figure out if the advantages and disadvantages can be tracked.
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, all of the problems can be fixed if users start to be aware of the problem in the first place.

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structure
Plan the essay before you write. Make a simple plan: what you will say in the intro, in each body part, and in the end.
structure
Make the view clear in the first paragraph. The reader should know your view from the start.
cohesion
Use clear order. Start with one idea, add the next. Use words like first, next, also, but to show link.
grammar
Keep to simple words. Check spell and grammar. Do not use many wrong spell words.
content
Give one or two real example to show your point. This helps the reader see your idea.
structure
End with a short clear finish that rest the view.
content
The essay tries to talk about both sides of the issue.
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There is a aim to end with a view.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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