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The diagram below shows how paper is made and recycled.

The given
vissual
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visual
 illustrates the manufacturing
proccess
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process
 of
paper
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 production and
recycling
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the recycling stage.
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, the plantation to
paper
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start
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 in the radiata pine thinnings. These are cut down to be penetrated
in to
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into
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 the de-barking drum. Later, it is placed into the chipper machine where the
peaces
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pieces
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 are chipped.
Afterthat
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After that
, the thermomechanical refiner is used in order to
humid
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 the substance. At
last
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, the long sheet is
placet
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placed
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 on the
paper
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 making machine.
Finally
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, the
paper
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 is converted
in to
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into
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 newsprint. Later on, the recycling part
which
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, which
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 is
paper
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 to
paper
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, begins with inserting the
peaces
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pieces
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 of kerbside collection
in
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 to after collection. And
then
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, de-incing removes the
coloring
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. After the cleaning and fine screening
done
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are done
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the
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, the
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 material is
being
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mixed with water
incide
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inside
of
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the thermomechanical and recycled pulp mix
and
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, and
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 the recycling concludes. The cycle continues like
this
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.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words paper with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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