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Writing Samples
Band 4

The internet has transformed the way information is shared and consumed, but it has also created problems that did not exist before. What are the most serious problems associated with the Internet and what solutions can you suggest?

The
worl wide
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World Wide
web
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Web
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 changes the method of information being exchanged,
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however
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 it
also
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 brings some
issue
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issues
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 that were never seen previously.
This
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 essay will first explain the
problem
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problems
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that occured
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occured
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occur
due to
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web
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factors
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such
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 as
sedentary
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a sedentary
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 lifestyle and poor physical communication
and
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, and
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 suggest possible remedies
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like by
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including
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 governmental actions
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such
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, such
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 as creating awareness with enough
education
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education,
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canprevent
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to prevent
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 these problems from happening.

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structure
Add a clear intro and a clear end. State what you will talk about.
content
Give more than one problem and more than one fix. Use simple facts or small examples.
grammar
Make sentences small and fix spelling and dots. Use one idea per sentence.
lexical
Use common words. Do not use tough words.
content
The idea is shown and plan to fix is stated.
structure
The topic is stated in a simple way.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cybersecurity
  • phishing
  • identity theft
  • misinformation
  • fake news
  • social isolation
  • internet addiction
  • data privacy
  • digital literacy
  • regulations
  • awareness programs
  • manipulate
  • proliferation
  • consent
  • escalated
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